Everyone has
right to live one’s own life. ―Waris Dirie, Desert Flower
There
was a girl who seemed to be perfect. She was not smart but always top of her
school. She was not nice but always beloved by pretty mother, great father and
many thoughtful friends. She was not attractive but good at relationships and
even elected as school president. Everything seemed to be perfect. Friends
of her mother who
wanted to take over her school uniforms used to say, “You must have no concern
about anything, huh?” But she often felt endless emptiness. She did not have
any dissatisfaction about her life, but she also did not have
any affection at her life. She had no dream, hobby or something that she really
wanted to do. The society that she has lived in for 16 years is a very strange
place. Everyone has the same goal and follows it. All students who have
different talents go along one way. ‘Be top of their elementary, middle and
high schools and get into a good university, then get a good job.’ But she
could not understand this social structure. ‘Who set the standard of a “good
life”?’ ‘Who on earth can evaluate someone’s life as successful or
unsuccessful?’ and ‘why do we try to follow the way that others want for us?’
She
decided to get out of the aimless life and find her own desirable life.
Therefore, she entered the HAFS international course. She had never been to the
U.S. and never thought of studying abroad. However, she has always been eager
to have such an opportunity to follow her dream in broader world. To someone, 3
years of HAFS life could be regarded as nothing. To someone, studying and
living abroad is considered to be nothing; to her, who lived her entire life in
Korea, these things needed great courage and patience.
During
the 3 years of high school, many hardships: language barrier, cultural sense of
difference made it difficult for her. However, she never regretted because it
was her own choice, which was the first one that she made with her own faith
and perspective. Therefore, she could endure the adversities for her pursued
life, wanted future.
I looove the thoughtfulness and honesty of your essays subin :) they always sound as if you're speaking straight to my heart!!! there were a few grammatically awkward phrases, but they can be easily smoothed out.
ReplyDeletefor example:
However, she has -> had always been eager to have such an opportunity to follow her dream in (a) broader world. To someone (else), 3 years of HAFS life could be regarded as nothing. To someone (else), studying and living abroad is -> could be considered "to be" -> as nothing; to her, who lived her entire life in Korea, these things needed great courage and patience.
thank you for uploading your PE assignment!! :) keep up the good work~~
oh...and just one more thing...I really really liked the phrase:
ReplyDelete"All students who have different talents go along one way."
so true...ㅠㅠ and not sure if that's necessarily a good thing :(